Hello, I asked in my description of the essay that i do not need strong words used as i am only a second year college student. I need it revised with the words changed around to more common words. Also Benito is spelled benito not banato. Also there are too many paragraphs. I need less paragraphs and more of a description on three or four major topics you choose. Also i feel like the topics you chose are very weak or vague. Also if you chose the first topic. I do not see much of an argument on how babo is a freedom fighter, you kept talking about delano. Also do you use any quotes from the book? As i said i feel like your argument or topics are weak. Also I need to have the quoted sentences explained either before or after. The quotes were not explained. Also put the author or where it came from. I needed you to please use the book Fanon, Frantz. The wretched of the earth to help prove your argument or what your trying to say. A thesis i wrote that you cannot use but you may use if you change the words around so its not similar is “The world in gray operates as a metaphor for the shrouded truth of captain cerenos condition as well as captain delanos morally ambiguous intentions concerning the fate of the san dominick, its captain and human cargo neither of which is apparent to “superficial skimmer of pages” ITALICIZE SHIP NAMES. Your sentence “delano negligently made unreasonable assumptions about the ship and what had actually happened” does not make sense.
A good quote that is an example is, Fanon argues the native intellectual often becomes “a common opportunist” when he attempts to exercise powers for his own purpose (49). This is just an example of how quotes should be set up. I did not see the point of the intro and first five body paragraphs. If you are doing the topic on babo being a freedom fighter you must focus more on babo being a freedom fighter in the intro and overall. Use the details from the intro and first five body paragraphs To disclaim delano and cereno after you state babo is a freedom fighter. Also i do not know why you used many outside sources when the two books benito cereno and the wretched of the earth should have been used the most……………………………………..